Thursday, January 24, 2013

Allusion Poem- Final




Can I do anything right?
Bring honor to the family name?
Nothing.
Hopeless.
Shame.
That's what I feel
When you yell my name

I cannot be that flawless Japanese doll
I cannot be the perfect bride
Just disappointment would come
Only if I tried

I’m sorry
But not
I cannot change who I was made to be.

The katana slices through my hair
A final step from trying to be
The perfect girl
To go against the standards of the world

The impracticable things I do,
I do for you
For as long as you're fine
It doesn't really matter
This body of mine

But then I realize
Maybe I do it for me

Does the pressure of the weights
Drag me down
Or help pull me up higher
To feel of worth
And not just dirt?

Now I sit atop the beam so narrow
As the champion
Who finally reached the arrow.

Man & Universe Graphic DRAAAAAFT


Saturday, January 19, 2013

Allusion Poem-DRAFT

Can she do anything right?
Bring honor to the family name?
Nothing.
Hopeless.
Shame.
That's what she feels
When you yell her name

She cannot be that good little girl
She cannot be the perfect bride
Just dissapointment would come
Only if one tried

She's sorry
But not
I cannot change who I was made to be.

The edge of the sword slices through her hair
A final step from trying to be
The perfect girl
To go against the standards of the world

The impracticable things she does,
She do for you
For as long as you're fine
It doesn't really matter
that soul of mine

But then she realizes
Maybe she does it for her

Does the pressure of the weights
Drag her down
Or pull her up higher
To feel of worth
And not just dirt?

Now she sits atop the beam so narrow
As the champion
that finally reached the arrow.

Monday, December 10, 2012

1st Semester Writing Portfolio

To Parents,


          Achievements that I am proud of from this past semester include: sentence fluency assessments, risky business essay, Coming of Age essay, and the College essay. Although I did do well on the majority of these assignments or tests, I could have improved them.
          I am most proud of my Coming of Age Essay and College Essay because of the grade I recieved on them (4) and the fact that I understood what I was doing, could follow the criteria, did my best on them, and actually pulled off the grade.
         A major challenge I had this semester would definately be time management and balance. I delt with them by making sure I payed attention in class, and writing due dates down. 
         Goals I have for next semester is to make better plans when it comes to group work, make sure I am able to contribute to a group, and to prioritize my different projects early on.
          I think these are realistic goals because they are more specific than just wanting to stop putting assignments off, and because it is what I need to work on in order to have 
bettered my grade this past semester, and what will help me later on.

To view my portfolio, please go here----> http://jjkurosawa.wix.com/joy2ndqportfolio 

After you have viewd my portfolio answer the questions below in a comment:



  1. What piece of writing did you like best in my portfolio and why?
  2. What did you like about my portfolio and sharing and what would you like to see me improve on?
  3. Which of the writing traits (ideas, organization, voice, word choice) do you feel was most successful for me?
  4. Which of the traits of writing would you like me to improve on in the coming semester?

Sunday, November 18, 2012

"Odd Girl Out" Movie Review



In the movie "Odd Girl Out" directed by Tom Mcloughlin, teenage girl Vanessa, (played by Alexa Vega) is effected by her peers, the internet, and more that tests her strength and confidence in herself. Like many teenagers in todays world, there is a pressure girls have put on them to be beautiful, especially in the high school environment. In this movie, the "bad girls": Stacy (Leah Pipes) and Nikki (Elizabeth Rice) push Vanessa, their once close friend, into many harmful situations. If I were to rate this movie based on storyline, uniqueness, clarity, quailty of filming, and overall how much I enjoyed watching this movie as a viewer, I would give it a solid one star. The storyline was a typical high school scene where a group of girls ice out one of their friends, resulting in harmful drama. The story is slightly worn out already, but on the plus side, the story was very clear to follow. One of the things that could be greatly improved in this movie is the filming, or more specifically, the lighting. In every classroom scene, it seems as if no lights are on, and some parts make me nauseous to continue to watch because of the different shots.









Thursday, November 15, 2012

Angry Letter


Your Address
Your City, State, Zipcode
November 15, 2012

McKinley High School
1039 South King St.
Honolulu, Hawaii 96814

Dear McKinley High school,

Year after year I have gladly attended multiple games and tournaments at your school’s gym. Because of your abundance of seating, exceptional number of courts, and delicious foods at the concession, your gym has always been one of my favorite to play at. 
Driving into the McKinley Student Council Gym parking lot, we drove past a few security guards, unaware of their purpose as guards are frequently used to direct traffic. Surprised and confused, we were subjected to pay a five dollar fee to park at your facilities. That day, our thoughts were not to pay for, but hope that there was parking left. As we stepped out of our car, there were reoccurring conversations throughout even the competitors of the pricing of parking. During the HHSAA Girls Volleyball State Championship and OIA playoff’s, the main bulk of games were held at your school. In the past athletic events I have participated in and attended at your school, there was never a charge for parking.  I have been to many events that charged for parking. But, there was constantly a charge, and the price was at a decent rate when comparing it to the event at that time. For example, the parking at the University of Hawaii at one point was at a high of five dollars. But, recently I’ve went and it has lowered to about three dollars, which is much more reasonable, especially since the events held there are of a decent purpose. I feel that the charge for parking should be taken away, or at the least lowered to an appropriate level.

Also, one night after a volleyball match we were instructed to leave the campus directly after the end of the game or else we would be locked in. At this particular game, both grandparents from both sides of my family had decided to attend, and because of the warning, we had to rush to the parking lot. Security guards had told us sternly to hurry and get off campus. Because of this, my grandmother almost tripped and fell. I understand that many people would like to go home after a long day, but I feel that you should not force people to leave.

Beside the fact, the staff that were present were decent. Even the security guard apologized for rushing us out so quickly. Both groups of workers had agreed with many of the people being put under these restrictions, and gave understanding for us. Because the people collecting money, and enforcing rules know and understand our situation, I feel that they should not have to force something that even they do not feel is right. 

I have nothing against the way you feel you must run things, but I do feel that you should be a little more fair or reasonable by taking away or lowering parking prices, and being more lenient on the time on vacating the campus.


Sincerely,




Joy Kurosawa

Sunday, October 28, 2012

Risky Business Essay(Draft)


Today’s 21st century teens have a multitude of problems that we are constantly working to solve. These include the obvious: drugs, alcohol, and reckless actions caused by pure stupidity. Actions such as these are most commonly discussed about because of the amount of teens that take part in them. One topic that is well known, but needs to be taken more seriously is the amount of pressure that society puts on girls to be beautiful. Although it is clear to most that girls will always be insecure, and some may argue that society is a good influence to them, it isn’t something to be taken lightly. Because of society, teen girls end up with depression, and causing harm to themselves. The high standards society hold on girls can have a positive affect on them, but more likely than not, the pressure to be perfect can go to extremes. 

Although there are many negative effects that society has on teenage girls, some still believe that to be false. Those who believe in the positive effects feel that society promotes a physically and mentally healthy lifestyle. According to Bernie DeGroat’s article “Exposure to sports may have positive effect on teen girls”, exposure to sports magazines and women’s sports on television encourages teen-age girls to focus on body image. In their study, 426 adolescent females ages 10-19 objected to a certain type of media exposure does predict increased health risks. However, they also found that girls reading sports magazines are more satisfied with their body and have less disturbed eating. Also, magazines like Shape or television shows like Dr. Oz are dedicated to helping women to achieve their physical goals. 

Besides what the less amount of people believe in, there are harmful effects of what society is capable of doing to a teenage girl. Being compared to every other girl makes one wonder if they are good enough, and this is without the influence of toothpick thin models strutting down the runway. Seeing this can inspire girls be like them, but end them up depressed about how they cannot achieve the same looks and body shape. Depression isnt taken very seriously, and because of that, this problem doesn’t have anyone trying to stop it. According to article, “More Than One In Ten Teen Girls Will Suffer From Depression” 13% of teenage girls have experienced a bout of serious depression in the past year. Depression can cause headache, nausea/vomiting, heart disease, osteoperosis, and high blood pressure. Most people think that being depressed is just a way of saying that they’re sad, but in reality there are mental and physical effects of being depressed. Teenage girls can become depressed because of the insecurities caused by the media. 

Adding another negative affect to the list, society can drive girls into self-harm when trying to achieve perfection. Self-harm includes as simple as a diet, to starvation, annorexia/bulemia, and overworking their bodies. Online at <http://womensenews.org/story/uncovering-gender/031029/teen-magazines-send-girls-all-the-wrong-messages#.UI2jLnORRNg> the magazine reported that 35% of U.S. girls 6 to 12 have been on at least one diet, and that among normal weight girls, 50-70% consider themselves overweight. From a girl who actually experienced being annorexic, Marya Hornbacher was four or five when she remembered that she decided she was fat. PBS shares her eating disorders story. Constantly throwing up, she went from 100 lbs to 63, and still wanted to lose weight. By age nine she bingeid and purged steadily, and eventually becoming so sick of the way she looked, she all but stopped eating. By 14, she had lost 25% of her body weight,  in her advanced annorexia could only be helped by a full time treatment at a locked institution. This is only one example of what many girls go through to achieve the standards that society places on them. 

In conclusion, there are many other topics about what risky activities teens are participating in these days, but what the pressure of society does to girls to be perfect needs to be brought up in a serious fashion. Some may say that society helps teen girls to develop into young women. But really all the world is doing is setting standards unrealistic and harmful to achieve. The things teens nowadays are willing to do to fit in needs to be taken more seriously because of the many girls suffering from clinical depression, annorexia, and harming themselves.