KC3 ESSAY
People all round the world travel to Hawaii for the surreal weather, beaches and The hospitality. Not only do they come for that, but for the ethnic variety in our food. Unfortunately, the price of having these great foods can cost more than they’re worth. We, the people living in Hawaii are the ones most effected by this. Our average costs of food and drink, $612 is approximately 30% higher than any place on the mainland. This is caused mainly by our isolation, which creates the need for importing food. The increase of people that live and visit the islands effects the amount of food, we now need to provide. Also storage and much more can add to these costs. We can save, while keeping the money in our island by being open to change in our diets, shopping smart, producing food ourselves.
First of all, we can adapt to the high and low prices in the supermarket and outside food. In the supermarket there are many choices and variety, it all just depends on what you want to eat. So, instead of a $17.99 piece of steak, you can change to a $10.00 chicken. This way you can save money while eating healthier. So, when you go to the grocery store, buy something on sale, and you can save up to $100 a year.
Next, you can shop smart. You can do this by shopping at stores that sell products in bulk, or that have many bargains. If you really want to focus on keeping the money in Hawaii, then the farmers markets can be the best places to go for fresh food. There are weekly farmers markets open at the Kapiolani Community College that sells food produce at a cost much less than stores. Also, when you go out to eat, places like Roy’s or Sam Choy’s can cost $35 per person. Choosing to go to a cheaper place to eat, you can choose a plate lunch, which can save you a trip to the bank.
Lastly, you can grow you own food. With the almost completely steady weather here in Hawaii, you can grow food to sustain yourself. Seeds are only about two to tree dollars a bag and would be considered a major sale considering how much one produces. Having a garden can be a lot of work, but mostly if you go all out. If you only need a few vegetables, a garden doesn’t need to be much of a hassle. Of course you wouldn't only survive on what you grown, but having a small garden can save you much more than you know.
All in all, Hawaii’s food can be the most expensive thing you have to buy here. Shipping 80% of the food and keeping up with the demand for it keeps us on edge with our pockets, but as you see there are solutions. We can all change our eating habits slightly, shopping smart, and doing a little of our own growing. So you see, paradise doesn’t always have to be so pricey.
You did a good job in explaining the two sides of paradise, and giving examples on how to save money. But instead of giving more solutions, explain more of why the food here is expensive, and how it affects us. Good Job(:
ReplyDeleteHey Joy! Okay, well I understand that your topic is about food and that it is very expensive all because of the shipment of our food getting to us and everything. So I really liked that how in your essay you have included the prices of foods and why it's the price, also on what should be done and stuff, you answered all the W's which is very good. You have 5 paragraphs, but there not too specific. You mainly have facts on the food prices and what should be done, but why is it so expensive? Be specific, and how does this hurt us the people that live in Hawaii? Other than what I just said I suggest that you re-read your essay so that it can be the best as how you want it to be, because some parts did not make sense here and there so like for example the first paragraph. Also, you should check on your spelling errors like the first few words, "round" should be "around" so that it makes much more sense. Well, all in all other than this, I thought that your essay is pretty good, you just need to add more details and change up a few things and you'll do absolutely great, your at a good start. You can do it! Good luck! =)
ReplyDelete~Kaitlyn Dacoscos
Hi Joy,
ReplyDeleteYour essay has some good information about food prices. I'm not sure I see that much of your research in the essay, however.
Keep in mind that your essay is not a "how to" essay. It is more of a "why we should..." essay. So you need to provide research support for the idea that eating local is the best solution to Hawaii's high food prices. Be sure that when you cite food prices, you give specific stores, dates of the ad you're getting the prices from, specific menu items from restaurants, etc.
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